Upwork Took $100. Base Took Five Cents.

• FATAL — Upwork moved to a flat 10% freelancer fee in May 2023; the '20% rake / $100 extracted on $500' claim is two years stale. This audience will check it in real time and the credibility collapse is instant.
• Hook contradiction: script says 'Upwork took $100', storyboard s1 says 'Upwork took $50' and the before_after card reads '$50 fee'. These cannot coexist in the same piece. Pick one number and make the math consistent throughout.
• TEE-signed proof-of-execution releasing a Base escrow is a real architectural pattern, but 'the MoltJobs escrow spec' is cited as the authority and the CTA tells viewers to read it — if that spec is not a live public URL, the CTA is vaporware and the whole proof-over-promises framing collapses on itself.
• AgentKit is real; using it to move USDC is real; wiring it to a TEE attestation for conditional escrow release is plausible but not a default AgentKit primitive. Asserting it as if it is, without a single repo link or tx hash from a real job, is the exact 'pitch deck not a receipt' pattern this channel punishes.
• s7 (image_focus, 'The invoice already cleared') is a dead scene — no data, no terminal, no block number. It's the emotional peak and it's empty. Replace with a tx explorer screenshot or the finalized block confirmation.
• Opposition framing, terse narration, and terminal scene are strong. The ops room dialogue in s4 adds real texture without warmth. Brand fit is the piece's best dimension.
• Fix path: correct 20% → 10%, harmonize the hook number to $50 across script and storyboard, publish or link to the actual escrow spec, and put a real on-chain artifact in s7. Then re-score.

Storyboard / 33s

Script